Love??-Original

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Characters-

Gaylen, a 20something young professional, married.

Tina, a 20something young nursing mother, married.

The baby-their child(non-speaking)

Setting- A living room in Maryland, Today.

Act 1

(Tina, sitting, nursing the baby. Gaylen, sitting drinking gin, on his laptop)

Gaylen- You shouldn't have done that.

Tina (looking at Gaylen) what?

Gaylen- You know what.

Tina (looking at the baby)-I guess I should know what the hell you're talking about.

Gaylen (looking at Tina)- and you do, I just wish you didn't do it.

Tina(looks away)- I can't believe you are so upset, its really not that big of deal. <

Gaylen- So you say, It makes me feel less than a man, like I'm not good enough.

Tina-you're so in touch with feeling and emotion, you can't see what a mess we're really in.

Gaylen-everything is gonna be fine babe, if you just trust me, we can get through this

Tina-You're NOT getting it, and I can't deal with this anymore

The baby- crying

Gaylen-Shh, put the baby to sleep and we'll have this conversation like civilized adults.

Tina(chuckling)-Well one of us anyways

Gaylen-very funny

Tina(exits to put baby to bed)

Gaylen(to himself, standing)- Where did our love go?

Tina-Babe, I'm trying to keep us together, the baby happy and you know I work and take classes, I cant be worried about your feeling thats much, I swear its not purposful.

Gaylen- I know your stressed. I get it but badmouthing me and telling OUR mothers about our finances will not solve the problems.

Tina-Its a blessing OUR mothers can help us out when we need it.

GAylen-The bills are up to date, the rent is paid and we are getting by

Tina(yelling)- I DON'T WANT TO GET BY!!! WHAT DON'T YOU UNDERSTAND

Gaylen-stop yelling

Tina- In college, before the baby, we were fine. We were fun, but now I don't know me, or you.

Gaylen(Yelling)-Tina WE AREN'T IN COLLEGE ANYMORE, things change, people grow up.

Tina- And this is your idea of growing up?? Struggling??

Gaylen-We did everything right, we can't change this, we just have to accept it

Tina- I don't know if this, us, is gonna work

Gaylen- Think of us before you make that decision

Tina- I think I have, you can take care of her. <wow! That was a surprise: nicely done!

Gaylen-Tina

Tina-I think I know what's best for me

Gaylen- I'll leave the room, you do what you want

Gaylen exits

END

Strong dialogue and stage direction, Kristen: believable conflict and characters: nicely done. However, all material highlighted blue contains English correctness issues that require attention. Gary